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You write the words so no one will understand, it is
Tuesday again, always Tuesday, even when it
is Friday and the school across the street shrieks with excitement, the
walls have ears and you say it is Tuesday and carefully write a list
of what you have and have not allowed yourself, because
it is always Tuesday and the walls shake their heads,
and trace the lines of your notes, shorter every week, but not
every day because it is not Tuesday and you can write what you
need, the walls do not have ears.

You do not use the phone because the words have slipped from your grasp,
the subtle difference between careful and controlled, the words on the paper
say I had an English degree as if it has fallen between the crack in the night
between yesterday and today. You say, fine, a word that says exactly what
you did not want it to, but you fold your shirt against your body, soft as tissue
until only your hands grasp themselves, twisted like birds,
poisoned.
Hear me read this poem: [link]


This poem was read by a group of middle school students learning about stream-of-consciousness writing. You can read their judgement here: [link]
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Given 2010-09-10
Tuesday by *sunshinegypsy ( Suggested by nycterent and Featured by Memnalar )
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MidnightMelodie Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student General Artist
I read this when you first submitted it and loved it. Reading it again is just as amazing.
It inspired me to try to write a stream of consciousness poem myself. After not having written in a while. So thank you for motivating me to write again :) ([link])
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Raito-chu Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
Today it is Tuesday...and I know just how that feels.
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
Woah. I really get the feel of modern poetry with this piece. The stream of consciousness method of writing always seems to baffle me in a way due to its odd structure and obscurity--mainly due to Virginia Woolfe and James Joyce--yet it's a method that I find endearing and wonderful.

Beautiful piece.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I don't do it often but they usually end up being my better poems. Haha. Don't mess with a good thing! Also I'm crazy so when I'm having one of my bad days this is pretty much all you can get out of me. :) I'm glad it wasn't too far-out to make sense!
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
It's not! It had some degree of difficulty, which is good, but not enough to make the reader's brain twist and snap. XD
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha! The best! I'm so glad. I had to go read it again. :D
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
Relish a good days work~
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trynke Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Student General Artist
You're good :D
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart: Cool!! Thanks. :)
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joanbausher Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Professional General Artist
I really like this Kate, it keeps your attention for sure, I want to print it out so I can read it more often without having to come to the computer. I can see why it was used in school.
joanie
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