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You write the words so no one will understand, it is
Tuesday again, always Tuesday, even when it
is Friday and the school across the street shrieks with excitement, the
walls have ears and you say it is Tuesday and carefully write a list
of what you have and have not allowed yourself, because
it is always Tuesday and the walls shake their heads,
and trace the lines of your notes, shorter every week, but not
every day because it is not Tuesday and you can write what you
need, the walls do not have ears.

You do not use the phone because the words have slipped from your grasp,
the subtle difference between careful and controlled, the words on the paper
say I had an English degree as if it has fallen between the crack in the night
between yesterday and today. You say, fine, a word that says exactly what
you did not want it to, but you fold your shirt against your body, soft as tissue
until only your hands grasp themselves, twisted like birds,
poisoned.
Hear me read this poem: [link]


This poem was read by a group of middle school students learning about stream-of-consciousness writing. You can read their judgement here: [link]
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Given 2010-09-10
Tuesday by *sunshinegypsy ( Suggested by nycterent and Featured by Memnalar )
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MidnightMelodie Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student General Artist
I read this when you first submitted it and loved it. Reading it again is just as amazing.
It inspired me to try to write a stream of consciousness poem myself. After not having written in a while. So thank you for motivating me to write again :) ([link])
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Raito-chu Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
Today it is Tuesday...and I know just how that feels.
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
Woah. I really get the feel of modern poetry with this piece. The stream of consciousness method of writing always seems to baffle me in a way due to its odd structure and obscurity--mainly due to Virginia Woolfe and James Joyce--yet it's a method that I find endearing and wonderful.

Beautiful piece.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! I don't do it often but they usually end up being my better poems. Haha. Don't mess with a good thing! Also I'm crazy so when I'm having one of my bad days this is pretty much all you can get out of me. :) I'm glad it wasn't too far-out to make sense!
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
It's not! It had some degree of difficulty, which is good, but not enough to make the reader's brain twist and snap. XD
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha! The best! I'm so glad. I had to go read it again. :D
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DucatRevel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student Writer
Relish a good days work~
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trynke Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Student General Artist
You're good :D
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart: Cool!! Thanks. :)
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joanbausher Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Professional General Artist
I really like this Kate, it keeps your attention for sure, I want to print it out so I can read it more often without having to come to the computer. I can see why it was used in school.
joanie
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh wow. Thanks so much. It meant a lot to me but I admit I was surprised at how many people liked it. It's good to have such a personal piece reach so many readers. :heart:
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
WOW!! I missed this one. Glad I took a look at your journal. There are so many pictures, feelings, and I don't know what all else that I don't know where to begin describing how this effects me. I'll keep it simple and just say that if I had only ever read this one thing from you I would be richer for the experience. There are some things that just tell you who a person really is. Everything that is, that makes someone who they are. This is you.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Wow, thanks! :) It was one of those poems that just comes straight out of you. I guess that's about as much "me" as it gets.
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FollowinTheBlackBird Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are certainly most welcome. Keep up the awesome work.
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Lunulae Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Writer
What an excellent piece of stream of consciousness writing! This is beyond fantastic. The "twisted like birds" bit was my favorite, it gave me shivers and made me picture dead birds with broken wings. Love it :heart:

On a side note: I teach an English class on creative writing, and we look at a lot of poetry. I've been wanting to introduce them to stream of consciousness writing for a while now. Could I possibly use this as a reference piece? It would be entirely non-profit and purely for educational purposes.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Hooray!! I'm glad you liked it and would be honored for you to use it as a teaching tool. I've got an English degree and always wanted to get back into school through my poetry :D Tell me how it goes.
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Lunulae Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Student Writer
So! Your poem was subject to a good half hour discussion in class today, and oh, it was wonderful, I wish you could have been there to hear what my students had to say. Of course, they're young, middle schoolers, so they didn't get all the more complex themes in the piece, but here are a few things they did have to say about your piece:

-This is surreal, isn't it, just like the Dali painting you showed us (in reference to "The Persistence of Memory")
-I like that the writer chose Tuesdays because Tuesdays are the worst days, even worse than Mondays, especially because T's sound so hard and pointy and knife-like. But maybe she chose Tuesday because something bad happened to her and she can't forget it, like the time I...(and then the student went off on a long, rambling tangent--so typical)
-I think it's about not having friends and feeling lonely when other people are happy, because the writer doesn't trust anyone and doesn't talk to people
-I think the writer is being sarcastic when she says fine because if she feels like she's being poisoned, she can't be fine. Maybe she's dying and doesn't want anyone to worry about her. Maybe she has cancer! (at which point I suggested that the persona need not be physically, literally be dying, but I think I lost them there)
-I think the writer's just scared. (I asked the student what the writer might be scared of, in her opinion, and she said, of everything--maybe she's scared of saying and doing things that will make people not like her anymore)

And last but not least, one student said, this poem, it smells like burning plastic. I don't like it. It makes me feel very sad.

Hope you enjoyed their reactions as much as I did :)
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Oh my god I love this!! Hahaha... It reminded me so much of my days tutoring English to middle schoolers. :D Actually some of the comments you got were better than the ones I got here!! I'm doing a feature on this in my journal. And hanging it on my wall! :hug: Thank you so much for the smile.
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ThermadorianGrey Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
This was my favorite of the DD's I read. The words have like an elegant old-time flow to them, and the use of metalanguage is just about as skilled as I've ever seen. The breaks are unconventional and quite aesthetically pleasing. Overall, this one's a winner.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Writer
This was one of my more experimental pieces when I was going through a crazy-phase. I'm glad I can write no matter what (and that I still get through to people, despite being a little off-the-wall)
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handswouldweave Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012   Writer
There's such a powerful sensation of isolation and simply being trapped in this. Even if the situation is foreign, the feeling is not and that's a wonderful feat in writing- to create something that encompasses your story and elicits entirely different memories in the reader.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Professional Writer
What a perfect thing to say! That's just exactly what I wanted. For everyone to find themselves, not me, in my words.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011   Writer
Something always controls us; but few of us are cursed with such an ungainly perception of the feeling of being under spells cast by words. Remarkable poem.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Professional Writer
:) Thanks so much!
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RequiemsandReveries Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011
wow....(in a good way)
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2011  Professional Writer
:D Thanks!
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EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011   Writer
Such an authentic voice spilling such secrets.
Beautifully conveyed.
Congratulations on the DD!
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Professional Writer
Thanks!! I was afraid it was too crazy and no one would get it, but I guess we're all crazy in our own way!
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EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011   Writer
Plenty of crazy to go around, I'd say.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Professional Writer
:) Well it certainly made me loosen up with my writing instead of just assuming no one would "get it".
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EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011   Writer
:heart:
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011   Writer
Well described, in language that is as lovely as it is painful. I can very much relate to this poem, and you've captured the situation and the emotion well. I admire your precision with words; every one in this piece feels exactly, precisely right to me.

I can't help but wonder if you're familiar with the Greg Brown song "Help Me Make It through This Funky Day":

It been Tuesday all week and it's Tuesday again
Today is a Parisian, I am an American


It's a favorite of mine. [link] Your piece is very different but has that similar "Tuesday" feel to it. Great work.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
That's an awesome song. Haha. Who knew. Tuesday's must be like that for a lot of us.
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lovelyloon Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Student


It is quite uncanny, how this resonates.

i was there..
Tight, lost words. Being 'fine'. Happiness resolutely forbidden.
Somewhere in there, i even lost the plan for a secure future with an English degree.

It happened on a Tuesday..
And every Tuesday, for months, i caved in and shattered all over again.

But every day was Tuesday.


Thank you..
Reading this has made me realize more than ever how far i fell, and how much taller i have stood.

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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Professional Writer
:) I'm so glad. I lost my plan for the future with my English degree as well. Funny how you put the work in and still are lost. We can't force ourselves to grow can we?
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lovelyloon Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Student

i was shown a different path that is actually far brighter for me.
But it was hard, letting go. After all those years.

No, we can't force ourselves to grow, or heal..

i think we can only let it happen.

:]

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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2010  Professional Writer
:) Very true.
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sesam-is-open Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
Featured:):hug:[link]
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Professional Writer
:heart:
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sesam-is-open Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010
:):hug:
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RebeccaHelms Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2010
You are brilliant. This is so beautifully written.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010  Professional Writer
:heart: Hopefully I will start writing again!
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RebeccaHelms Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
I will quite selfishly agree, but one must make allowances for the creative impulse to seek other channels. :) Writing or not I am confident you will explore and live life creatively enriching others in various mediums, as you inspired me here.
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Professional Writer
Yay! I hope so, but writing is my favourite and I would like to get back to it. Sometimes you just reach a point where it's not possible, but I always come back.
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RebeccaHelms Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010
Totally how it works for me, as well.
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sesam-is-open Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010
What can I say Kate!
This is an Absolutely poem!:icondarkmarek:
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2010  Professional Writer
:D
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Wolf-Flash Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010
<3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2010  Professional Writer
:D
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jessicaconk Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Why have I not faved this already?
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