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Literature Text
From one side:
The tree, a branch,
no breath:
T-3:19
"Do you know where you are?"
In the crackling dark,
nowhere.
From the other:
My clothes are sawed off, the forty dollar bra,
the skirt from my cousin,
trashed at T-3
The tube goes sleekly down my throat, they start
pumping, still no heart beat
and the voice of the doctor goes up,
T-2
the crash cart, fumbled to my side,
the jerk, the collapse
T-1
The holes in my stomach closing, the tentative beep,
the life crept back into a body
The tree, a branch,
no breath:
T-3:19
"Do you know where you are?"
In the crackling dark,
nowhere.
From the other:
My clothes are sawed off, the forty dollar bra,
the skirt from my cousin,
trashed at T-3
The tube goes sleekly down my throat, they start
pumping, still no heart beat
and the voice of the doctor goes up,
T-2
the crash cart, fumbled to my side,
the jerk, the collapse
T-1
The holes in my stomach closing, the tentative beep,
the life crept back into a body
story of my life. also, don't kid yourself. there's no white light. I was dead for 3 minutes and 19 seconds and I didn't see shit.
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Very raw; I like that. It's powerful.
I liked the countdown, but at the end, I kept wanting to reverse it (count up).
The T-<insert number here> confused me at first. Then I thought, "T minus <insert time here>?" If that's what I was supposed to be thinking, exchanging the dash for "minus" might help.
Anyway, I liked this a lot.
I liked the countdown, but at the end, I kept wanting to reverse it (count up).
The T-<insert number here> confused me at first. Then I thought, "T minus <insert time here>?" If that's what I was supposed to be thinking, exchanging the dash for "minus" might help.
Anyway, I liked this a lot.